Assignment 4
You will see a slideshow below - it will reveal your final placement.
Comments are below.
Remember, they are posted in alphabetical order based on your Simming Username. You will have to watch the slideshow to know your actual placement.
Remember, they are posted in alphabetical order based on your Simming Username. You will have to watch the slideshow to know your actual placement.
Chell & Ginger Farro
97 points
Photo Quality: 5/5
Model Appearance: 5/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 9.5/10 Gothic Appeal: 9.5/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 9/10 Total: 48/50 Okay…woah…did I read that right? It was Cheryl who actually killed Charlotte and made it look like the other way around? I assumed Charlotte had done the killing until the scrapbook appeared and the words “I warned you, Charlotte, I would do it.” That sounds like Cheryl killed Charlotte and disappeared, leaving everyone to believe Charlotte was the murderer. Now, if I’m totally wrong, I’m sorry! Lol But that is great! Your photo is also very great. Nice work! |
Photo Quality: 5/5
Model Appearance: 5/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 9/10 Gothic Appeal: 9/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 9/10 Total: 47/50 Your story was full of bitterness and jealousy that must have been brewing in Charlotte for years. Full of mystery and intrigue and it’s obvious who is who in this photo. Well done. I like the way they are so opposite in so many ways even down to the opposed positioning. |
Movotti & Midori Movotti
89.5 points
Photo Quality: 5/5
Model Appearance: 5/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 7/10 Gothic Appeal: 7/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 8/10 Total: 42/50 Denial is a good way to interpret this assignment. It’s clear that Ori is in major denial regarding his sister. Overall, you did what was asked. I love the setup of the photo and your story was written pretty well. I only had two very minor suggestions – 1) I understand that Ori is supposed to be oblivious (in denial) with what his sister is doing, but it is obvious that he’s worried. He doesn’t want to admit that his sister is a monster, but he is worried about it nonetheless – that didn’t come across in his pose. He looks nonchalant, almost as if he’s cool with what’s happening behind him. A bit more of a worried expression and pose would have been awesome. 2) The story was good, but I wished a variety of excuses was used instead of “it’s a wild animal” each time. It would have been a little more convincing that he’s in denial if he came up with various excuses for the deaths, rather than just “it’s a wild animal.” But those are minor, like I said! |
Photo Quality: 5/5
Model Appearance: 5/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 8/10 Gothic Appeal: 8.5/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 9/10 Total: 45.5/50 Blinded by family ties, comes through so well in your story. Midori chooses to ignore things going on around him, or is oblivious to them, which is exactly how the brief is explained so well done, Movotti. The bored look on his face shows how he doesn’t really care about anything much except his sister and his dog. You did a great job again portraying what was going on, both in your story and your photo. |
NShipp & Jasmine Lopez
85.5 points
Photo Quality: 3/5
Model Appearance: 4/5 Background/Setting: 4/5 Overall Composition: 4/5 Creativity/Originality: 7.5/10 Gothic Appeal: 8/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 8/10 Total: 38.5/50 Your idea was a little predictable, but you did well with it. I liked the descriptions you gave for how much of a gentleman the boyfriend was pretending to be and how it obviously made Jasmine feel giddy and happy. That’s a great thing to convey. I do think the ending came a bit abruptly and a little lackluster – more ominous and eerie writings here would have been fun, but for the most part, this is one of your best thought out stories. Your photo was also an improvement from the earlier rounds and I love the pose choice for Jasmine. It’s a great one! I also like the idea of having the boyfriend appear as a looming, large-than-life presence behind her. The only thing I’d say that could have been done without is the blurred black space around Jasmine. I’m not sure what that is, but it looks like funky blurred wings. Overall, this is one of your best entries. Good work. |
Photo Quality: 5/5
Model Appearance: 5/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 9/10 Gothic Appeal: 8/10 Creativity of Mini Story:8/10 Total: 45/50 Your editing and shot is well executed this week. The composition is excellent and the fear and surprise showed so well on her face even with a blindfold. Well done. A well-written story and a little predictable but interesting and fun to read. |
Vid & Sam Prince
91.5 points
Photo Quality: 5/5
Model Appearance: 5/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 9/10 Gothic Appeal: 8/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 8.5/10 Total: 45.5/50 Oooh, is Amy a succubus? I love that! I think this is really a great entry and you did a wonderful job with the execution of it. I honestly had no complaints (I love the bloodied hand sticking out of her backpack, by the way). Amy is still pretty cool looking, even if she’s a demon. The one and only thing I would have suggested would have been to either write this from a 3rd person POV or remove the part about “waking up with no memory”. I say that because when you write in 1st person POV, you remember the details – like the beginning of the story shows. Mentioning waking up with “no memory” of what happened means you couldn’t be the one telling us what happens. See what I mean? Lol If that memory thing wasn’t there, this would make sense, or if you’d written it from 3rd person POV. But that’s the writer in me coming out! |
Photo Quality: 4/5
Model Appearance: 4/5 Background/Setting: 5/5 Overall Composition: 5/5 Creativity/Originality: 9/10 Gothic Appeal: 8/10 Creativity of Mini Story: 9/10 Total: 44/50 Your story was my pick for this round. I like the way you expressed yourself in this story. Couple of grammatical things but the content and story totally had me engaged. The quality of your photo, showed imagination and horror more than Gothic, but I all the little details in the background were awesome. Sam looks quite doomed with his psychotic girlfriend but keeps going back for more. Poor Sam. The shot of him was great, but she looked a little cartoony compared to Sam. |